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Final Cut of “Trapped”

Teacher Feedback

  • 28/40
  • Change scrolling titles effect
  • Background noise sometimes too loud
  • Range of shot types, well framed – could have more variety e.g. during conversations
  • Plot needs to move faster, to include more

Unfortunately most of these improvments were impossible to do in the given amount of time of 4 days. To incorporate a wider variety of shots I would have had to refilm several scenes, including the cafe scene. The same would have probably had to be done to make the plot move faster, after rescripting parts of the story. It was simply impossible for me to make these alterations and I didn’t have time. I did try to change the sound levels on some of the worst shots for background noise, which were mainly in the cafe scene. The main thing I changed were the end credits. The scrolling effect seemed to take too long to get through all the credits and were quite boring. Instead of this, I now have credits that just appear and dissappear, so as to get through them a bit faster.

 Teacher Feedback

  • 4/10
  • Change Fonts
  • Alter Background
  • Better Images

I took new pictures of the two lead characters over the weekend, with them wearing black shirts, and took the picture against a black background. I planned to make my background black, so taking the picture against a black background meant that there would not be a lighter outline on the images of Toby and Harry. Once I had changed the images and background, it looked a lot better, and it was decided that the fonts looked much better now they were on a different background, as they stood out much more. I also decided to put a quote from my magazine review on the poster instead of two star ratings. This makes the poster a bit more interesting, and also provides a link the review. I am a lot happier with the poster, I think the background works much better and the images are a much better quality. I especially like the unfocused effect on Harry, as it makes him look mysterious and makes Toby stand out more.

Because I had already recieved feedback from my teacher, I first made these improvements before showing my target audience the review

Teacher Feedback

  • 6/10
  • Lots of grammatical and spelling errors
  • Verdict doesn’t make sense
  • Get rid of ellipsis at the end

I made these alterations, which were really just gramatical errors, and then showed the review to several members of my target audience. They read my review and pointed out a couple more speeling errors! Overall they were really pleased with it. They liked the layout, and all agreed that they found it appealling and would probably read the review. They also said that reading the review inspired them to see the film. The one criticism they had was they would like to see a star rating of the film, as a way to quickly see the quality of the film. I have therefore given “Trapped” a four star rating (don’t want to me too generous) at the end of the review!

Happy New Year!!!!! 😀

So I got back to school on Thursday, and on Friday I got feedback from all 3 of my tasks from my teacher with provisional marks. There weren’t quite as good as I’d have hoped for, so therefore I have spent the last few days making improvements that were possible in the time. I now have all 3 tasks completely finished and done, with improvements made!! 🙂

Magazine Review Draft

This is my first draft of my magazine review for “Trapped” in an addition of “Empire” magazine

The christmas break begins tomorrow, but when we return after christmas I will I shall show it to members of my target audience and get some audience feedback so I can improve it!

Magazine Reviews Research

My second Ancillary Task is to design and write a review for my short film. There are many different movie and media magazine today, that use different writing and styles to review films. I need to choose one a magazine to have me review in that will appeal to members of my Target Audience and is suitable for “Trapped”.

Sight & Sound 

  • Sight & Sound Review of “Bounce”
  • Information: There is a a very long and comprehensive
  • list of the Cast & Crew of the film, seen on the left side of review. It literally includes every single person involved, from the director to the animal trainers! I think this is a bit too detailed for a simple film review. Plus I wouldn’t have enought cast & crew to make a list this long!!
  • Synopsis: “Sight & Sound” give the entire plot in a smaller section before going on to actually review the film. Therefore if you are reading this before you see the film, the film is totally ruined for you, as they tell the reader the end. I think this is rather bad and not appropriate for a film review, something a cinema reader reads before going to see the film to see if it’s good or not, not what will happen in the film!
  • Review: The review follows the synopsis. The review is quite detailed and uses technical and comples language throughout. The author refers back to and cross references with the cast and crews previous work when reviewing the film, comparing good and bad points.

Overall, “Sight & Sound” provides what I feel is an over detailed review of the film, with more informatin than is neccasary to know when reviewing the film on release in a cinema or on DVD. “Sight & Sound” is generally a higher-brow magazine which discusses media forms in a serious and technical way. I think technical language is very important and should be used, but I think it is a bit too serious and too detailed to appeal to members of my Target Audience

Empire

  • Information: The information given in “Empire” magazine is a lot less comprehensive and detailed. It gives a few

    Empire review of "Another Year"

    major details, such as the director, main cast and certifaction. It is given in a small box at the beginning of the review on the left. It’s cast and crew list is no where near as detailed as “Sight & Sound”, and I think this would work better for my target audience.

  • Synopsis: “Empire” gives a brief plot outline if the film before the review, not giving any major details away about the film. I think this is a much better way to have it, as it still gives you an idea of the film without giving away the whole plot. Therefore, the reader still has an insentive to go and see the film.
  • Review: The review uses less technical language that “Sight & Sound” and is less serious. However, it is still a detailed review that talks about technical aspects of the film and talks of other works and successes by the cast and crew. I think this less serious, slightly comical tone will be more appealing to my target audience, and it is more likley they will read it.

Overall, “Empire” is definately the less intellectual magazine and review of the two. It is more casual and comical than “Sight & Sound” and is generally less detailed in its film details. It is not a “dumbed down” review though, there is still extensive film knowledge shown in the review. I think an “Empire” styles review would be much better suited for my film, as it is likely to be more appealing to my target audience.